I am a Year 6 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Kia ora Faafua, thank you for sharing your descriptive writing. I like how you used adjectives to help your reader imagine the scene. What was the main mood you were hoping to convey in this writing?
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Kia ora Faafua, thank you for sharing your descriptive writing. I like how you used adjectives to help your reader imagine the scene. What was the main mood you were hoping to convey in this writing?
ReplyDeleteKia ora Faafua I really like planed it and maybe you could add more detail next time and it would be alot better, I like to read more from you!
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