Characters:Drake,Chris,Brown and Patrick
When:1945
Where: In a park and in a forest
What: RIng haunted Drake,Chris,Brown and Patrick
Colour Grey,Black
Place:In a haunted castle
Ring Huanting 4 brothers
It was a dark lighting day4 brothers called Drake,Chris,Brown and Patrick walked in the forest in the dark. They were throwing rocks at the trees and that. But then we heard a noise. Suddenly a ghost called a ring popped out of a tree we ran so fast to our house. We locked all the doors in our house.
We saw the ring again our parents went on holiday. We were so scared we said to ourselves it is the ring haunting us. We all slept together. We all had goosebumps the next day our parents came home and the ring disappeared and the 4 brothers told their parents their story.
Hi Faafua, I found your story interesting and I like how you have 4 brother and no sister, but there some mistake like how you don't have space on day4 and you also have to put comma so the reader can read how you want them to read,were you working with Patrick? also how do you pronounce huanting?.Keep up .
ReplyDeletebonjour my name is Murray I would love to say how you did your work and how many minutes did your work take? I love the way you were Writing. what country did this take place and how old was the boys I enjoy the way you did your work keep up the stunning work.
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