I am a Year 6 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Kia ora Faafua Thank you for sharing your poem. I like how you have used rhyme, alliteration and repetition. It would have been great to see your face in the video because this is a great performance! You read very well and I was impressed by how you introduced yourself and your topic at the beginning.
Hello Faafua, its Ruqayat your classmate. I really love your slam poetry. You spoke really clearly and had very good rhymes and alliteration. Keep up the good work!
Kia ora Faafua,I watched your screencastify and I really enjoyed it, I also liked how you used personification in your poem and what you could do is add more words to your slam poetry.
Kia Ora Faafua, I really like how you intorduced yourself and how you spoke clearly your peom was amazing but I liked all the rhymes well done keep up the good work.
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Kia ora Faafua
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing your poem. I like how you have used rhyme, alliteration and repetition. It would have been great to see your face in the video because this is a great performance! You read very well and I was impressed by how you introduced yourself and your topic at the beginning.
kia ora faafua i like how you used lots of rhymes and how you speaked clearly
ReplyDeleteHello Faafua, its Ruqayat your classmate. I really love your slam poetry. You spoke really clearly and had very good rhymes and alliteration. Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteKind regards ¬ Ruqayat
Kia ora Faafua,I watched your screencastify and I really enjoyed it, I also liked how you used personification in your poem and what you could do is add more words to your slam poetry.
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Faafua, I really like how you intorduced yourself and how you spoke clearly your peom was amazing but I liked all the rhymes well done keep up the good work.
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